I am cool Blister is not Blister is not cool Like me, i am cool
deleteddeletedover 10 years ago
that cat stuff is gimmicky as hell. "hello i am a cat what is my existence" could pluck that out of any 15-year old girl's tumblr *about me* section
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deleteddeletedover 10 years ago
what have you expressed in this poem that you couldn't just write out in prose? all you've done is scramble together a bunch of pseudo-profound sounding musings of life that really don't mean anything; there's no unifying theme other than *life is misery*, you jump from lines like "all things are prophecy" to "all music plays in my own ear" ??? what does this even mean?? it's just plain bad. there's no beauty here. it's an incoherent mess and anyone reading this is gonna think a.) it's a paraody or b.) leave immensely dissatisfied
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deleteddeletedover 10 years ago
This is poetry:
deleteddeletedover 10 years ago
If you think poetry's supposed to be just rhymes, you suck bro. Poetry is soul, not an autism of arrangement.
deleteddeletedover 10 years ago
ok but where's the poetry
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deleteddeletedover 10 years ago
Well I think I did quite well anyway.
deleteddeletedover 10 years ago
This is definitely the last one:
deleteddeletedover 10 years ago
Wait, I had one more in me:
deleteddeletedover 10 years ago
Last one:
deleteddeletedover 10 years ago
Here's another one:
deleteddeletedover 10 years ago
I am no egotist. An egotist wants for nobody but himself.
First was recreational. Second was a "nonsense" poem we had to free write in class. The fact that these both have the " ____ like (insert imagery here)" is purely a coincidence, these were written months apart. I chose them because everything else I am either saving for a publication, or I think are awful. These are tolerable so feel free to vomit all over them.